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The pie groph show the result of survey of children activities

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The assigned pie charts elucidate the information about the proportion of men and women who take participate in cultural and recreational activities which result conducted by survey. To begin with, maximum boys preferred to computer games in free time accounted to 34percent whereas, girls half from boys (16percent). 26 percent males interested for basketball and girls not love this particular game they like to netball at 15 percent. The percentages of girls 21 percent for reading However, just 2 percent boys want read books. Shifting to remaining data, both genders equal preference for music comprised by 10 percent. The girls like dancing at spare time with 27 percent. The proportion of basketball and soccer for man's 26 and 17 percent respectively. Women's like gymnastics at 11 percent throughout the span of time. To cap it all, it is lucid that boys more facinated to computer games, nevertheless girls for dancing.
The assigned pie charts elucidate the information about the proportion of
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preferred to computer games in free time accounted to
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half from
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. 26
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basketball and
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this particular game they like to netball at 15
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21
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for reading
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want read books. Shifting to remaining data, both genders equal preference for music comprised by 10
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. The
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like dancing at spare time with 27
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's 26 and 17
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