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The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. 3Q3d
This pie graph depicts the differences in the interests between the two genders and what they prefer to spend more time on. It is clear from the graphs that boys are fond in the activities which require much body power more than girls are. According to what is shown in the males' pie graph, we can obviously notice that they give time to the computer games much more comparing to any other activity, and unfortunately they read much less. However, females give their most time to the dancing, and the reading time percentage is the second one on their activities graph. To sum up, we could say that, girls read much more than boys, but we clearly see that both genders listen to music equally, while the time wich boys spend on basketball is almost the same time wich girls spend on dancing.
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that boys are fond in the activities which require
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, we can
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to the computer games
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, females give their most
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to the dancing, and the reading
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percentage is the second one on their activities
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boys spend on basketball is almost the same
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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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