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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. Write at least 150 words.

The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs. 15aXq
The pie charts illustrates the analysis of cultural and leisure activities performed by boys and girls. From an overall perspective it can be observed that the boys spend most of their time in computer games and least in reading, correspondingly the girls spend most of their time in dancing and least in listening to music. It is readily apparent that the Computer games is preferred by the boys with 34%. Next, basketball which has 26% is the second highest preferred activity. Then, it is followed by the Soccer which has 17%, listening to music which has 10% and finally, reading which is the least favourite activity for boys. From an observation, it can be seen that Dancing has 27%, which has the highest interested activity which is followed by reading with 21%, computer games which has 16%, netball that is liked by 15%, gymnastics which has 11% participation and finally listening to music is the least participated activity for girls. In sum, most of the boys pariticipated in computer games and only a few took reading and similarly many girls preferred dancing and very few participated in listening to music. Both boys and girls have equal participation in listening to music.
The pie charts illustrates the analysis of cultural and leisure activities performed

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basketball which has 26% is the second highest preferred activity. Then, it
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the Soccer which has 17%, listening to
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that Dancing has 27%, which has the highest interested activity

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with 21%, computer
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listening to
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is the least participated

activity for girls.

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IELTS academic The pie graphs below show the result of a survey of children's activities. The first graph shows the cultural and leisure activities that boys participate in, whereas the second graph shows the activities in which the girls participate. Write a report describing the information shown in the two pie graphs.

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