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The pie charts show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

The pie charts show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003. md7L
The provided pie charts give information about the amount of energy which was produced by various sources in a country from 1985 to 2003. Overall, it is obvious that oil experienced a significant declined, but this figure was the most used energy source during the period time. It is clear that the use of oil decreased significantly to approximately two fifths (39%) in 2003, although its usage was just over a half (52%) in 1985. In addition, the figure for nuclear also declined from 22% to 17% over the given period. One the other hand, the percentage of natural gas saw a significant increase during the period, rising from 13% to 23%, and becoming the second primary source from which the energy was produced. The proportion of energy produced from coal and other renewable increased by 5% and 3% respectively. Finally, the use of hydrogen remained stable, at 4% in 1985 and 2003, making it the least used source to provide energy.
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in a country from 1985 to 2003.

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during the period time.

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over a half (52%) in 1985.
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a significant increase during the period, rising from 13% to 23%, and becoming the second primary
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from which the
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was produced
. The proportion of
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produced from coal and other renewable increased by 5% and 3%
respectively
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Finally
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use
of hydrogen remained stable, at 4% in 1985 and 2003, making it the least
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the proportion of the energy produced from different sources in a country between 1985 and 2003.

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