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The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India

The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India ExV3
The graphs illustrate the consumption of 4 types of food used in the word in 2008. The figures are compared to the amounts of food used in china and India in the same year. As an overall trend, the two countries showed different food consumption from the world average, while processed food consumption still had the largest percentages in all the three charts. In particular, processed food consumption was the highest in the in the world, accounting for 41%, which was followed by vegetables and fruits at 29% and animal food at a quarter. Only 4% consisted of nut and seeds consumption. Likewise, China used processed food in the largest proportion of 39%. Animal food showed the same figure as the world's average, 25%. Vegetable and fruits was used at 23% while nuts and seeds showed less than a half figure. In India, both vegetable and processed food were used the most in the year 2008 with percentages of 34% and 32% respectively, nuts and seeds used in this country showed the largest proportion among the three charts given, making up 19% at this time.
The graphs illustrate the
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of 4 types of
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food
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used
in the word in 2008. The figures
are compared
to the amounts of
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food
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used
in
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china
and India in the same year. As an
overall
trend, the two countries
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showed
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different
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food
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consumption
from the world average, while
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processed
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food
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consumption
still
had the largest percentages in all the three charts.

In particular
,
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processed
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food
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consumption
was the highest
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in the in the
world, accounting for 41%, which
was followed
by vegetables and fruits at 29% and animal
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food
at a quarter.
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Only
4% consisted of nut and seeds consumption.

Likewise
, China
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used
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processed
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food
in the largest proportion of 39%. Animal
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food
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showed
the same figure as the world's average, 25%. Vegetable and fruits was
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used
at 23% while nuts and seeds
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less than a half figure.

In India, both vegetable and
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processed
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food
were
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used
the most in the year 2008 with percentages of 34% and 32%
respectively
, nuts and seeds
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used
in this country
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showed
the largest proportion among the three charts
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given
, making up 19% at this time.
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IELTS academic The pie charts show the average consumption of food in the world in 2008 compared to two countries; China and India

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