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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. JAlB
This diagram shows that there are a number of processes involved in the commercial production of frozen fish pies. The main ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas and sauce, with sliced potatoes, and they are prepared separately. The potatoes, which may have been delivered up to a month in advance, are cleaned, peeled and cut into slices. The slices are boiled and then chilled before being stored until needed. The preparation of the fish is more labour intensive than the preparation of the potatoes. Within twelve hours of being delivered to the factory, the fresh fish is cooked by being steamed with lemon juice and salt. Then the skin and bones are removed by hand and disposed of, before a visual inspection takes place. After this, the pies are assembled in microwaveable containers Peas and sauce, which have also been prepared, are added to the fish and then the pie is covered with a layer of cooked potato slices. The pies are then wrapped and frozen. At this point they are ready for dispatch, or they may be stored at the factory before being dispatched.
This diagram
shows
that there are a number of processes involved in the commercial production of frozen fish pies. The main ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas and sauce, with sliced
potatoes
, and they
are prepared
separately
. The
potatoes
, which may have
been delivered
up to a month in advance,
are cleaned
, peeled and
cut
into slices.
The
slices
are boiled
and then chilled
before
being stored
until needed.
The
preparation of the fish is more
labour intensive
than the preparation of the
potatoes
. Within twelve hours of
being delivered
to the factory, the fresh fish
is cooked
by
being steamed
with lemon juice and salt. Then the skin and bones
are removed
by hand and disposed of,
before
a visual inspection takes place.

After this, the pies
are assembled
in microwaveable containers Peas and sauce, which have
also
been prepared
, are
added
to the fish and then the pie
is covered
with a layer of cooked
potato
slices. The pies are then wrapped and frozen. At this point they are ready for dispatch, or they may
be stored
at the factory
before
being dispatched
.
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IELTS academic The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies.

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2 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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