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The pie charts prescribe data about the amount of money that two Asian countries spent on paying for five categories of household services in 2010.

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The pie charts prescribe data about the amount of money that two Asian countries spent on paying for five categories of household services in 2010. In general, housing, food and other goods and services were most purchased by both Japanese and Malaysian population, while transport and health care were less of a priority during the year 2010. To be specific, Malaysians allocated the biggest amount of total cost on housing with over a third, which was higher than that of Japan (about a fifth). Conversely, Japanese householders paid the highest percentage on other goods and services, at 29%, which was slightly more than in Malaysia. Meanwhile, food expenditure ranked 2nd in these nations, and there was no significant difference, at 24% and 27% for Japan and Malaysia, respectively. However, in Japan, 1 out of 5 householders paid money for transport and the expense on health care was the lowest with just only 6%. Strikingly, the amount of money spent on transport and health care in Japan were always twice as much as those in Malaysia
The pie charts prescribe data about the amount of money that two Asian countries spent on paying for five categories of household services in 2010.

In general
, housing, food and other
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goods
and services were most
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purchased
by both Japanese and Malaysian population, while transport and health care were less of a priority during the year 2010.

To be specific, Malaysians allocated the biggest amount of total cost on housing with over a third, which was higher than that of
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Japan
(about a fifth).
Conversely
, Japanese householders paid the highest percentage on other
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goods
and services, at 29%, which was
slightly
more than in Malaysia. Meanwhile, food expenditure ranked 2nd in these nations, and there was no significant difference, at 24% and 27% for
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Japan
and Malaysia,
respectively
.

However
, in
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Japan
, 1 out of 5 householders paid money for transport and the expense on health care was the lowest with
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just
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only
6%.
Strikingly
, the amount of money spent on transport and health care in
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Japan
were always twice as much as those in Malaysia
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IELTS academic The pie charts prescribe data about the amount of money that two Asian countries spent on paying for five categories of household services in 2010.

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