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The pie charts illustrate how much energy

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The pie charts illustrate how much energy namely gas, coal, petro, nuclear as well as others were produced in France throughout the decade commencing from 1995 Overall, it is clear that the figure for petrol witnessed a descending trend while the opposite trends were true for that of others. As we can see that petrol was replaced gradually by the sustainable engergy. Looking at the chart in further details, there was a similar in the propotion of Gas and Coal which made up 29. 63 and 26. 80 in 1995, respectively. Both of them increased minimally by 0. 68 and 1. 13 in 2005. As be seen from the charts, the percentage of petro occupied up to a third in 1995 but it saw a rapid decrease to 19. 55 in 2005. People used nuclear and others energy instead of petrol. Therefore, the propotion of nuclear and others engergy was nearly double from 6. 40 and 4. 90 to 10. 10 and 9. 10 in the last year
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namely
gas, coal,
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petro
, nuclear
as well
as others
were produced
in France throughout the decade commencing from 1995

Overall
, it is
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clear
that the figure for petrol witnessed a descending trend while the opposite trends were true for that of others.
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As
we can
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see
that petrol
was replaced
gradually
by the sustainable
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engergy
.

Looking at the chart in
further
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details
, there was a similar in the
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propotion
of Gas and Coal which made up 29. 63 and 26. 80 in 1995,
respectively
. Both of them increased
minimally
by 0. 68 and 1. 13 in 2005.

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seen
from the charts, the percentage of
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petro
occupied up to a third in 1995
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it
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saw
a rapid decrease to 19. 55 in 2005.
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People
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used
nuclear
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and others
energy
instead
of petrol.
Therefore
, the
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propotion
of nuclear
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and others
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engergy
was
nearly
double from 6. 40 and 4. 90 to 10. 10 and 9. 10 in the last year
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