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Opinions are divided on whether phones should be strictly prohibited in public spaces such as libraries, shops or public transport.

Opinions are divided on whether phones should be strictly prohibited in public spaces such as libraries, shops or public transport. LLw8K
Opinions are divided on whether phones should be strictly prohibited in public spaces such as libraries, shops or public transport. I believe that such a ban is unnecessary and is problematic and that there are conferred benefits from allowing people to use their phones in these settings. Granted, one might argue that phones should not be allowed in public areas because the use of this device could annoy other people. A good example is that the sound of someone talking on the phone or their notifications could distract people who are trying to study in a library. However, this problem could be resolved without prohibiting the use of phones completely in public spaces. A straightforward measure would be to ask people to switch off the ringtones, turn on the vibration mode and answer their phone call elsewhere to avoid annoying other people. To add further credence to my assertion, I note that it would also be difficult to enforce a ban on phones in public places. This is because it would require an unimaginable amount of manpower to make it work: it would be unthinkable to have a police officer on each bus journey or in each shop and library to enforce the said law. Perhaps the most frequently cited reason for using phones in public is that phone users can quickly contact their friends or family or the police in emergency cases. In conclusion, banning phones in public areas would neither be necessary nor plausible. Instead, people should pay attention to how they use their device in public places so that they can benefit from it without disturbing others.
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example is that the sound of someone talking on the
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who are trying to study in a library.
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be resolved
without prohibiting the
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completely in
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spaces. A straightforward measure would be to ask
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people
to switch off the ringtones, turn on the vibration mode and answer their
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call elsewhere to avoid annoying other
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people
. To
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add
further
credence to my assertion, I note that it would
also
be difficult to enforce a ban on
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phones
in
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public
places. This is
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because
it would require an unimaginable amount of manpower to
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make
it work: it would be unthinkable to have a police officer on each bus journey or in each shop and library to enforce the said law. Perhaps the most
frequently
cited reason for using
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phones
in
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public
is that
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users can
quickly
contact their friends or family or the police in emergency cases.

In conclusion
, banning
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phones
in
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public
areas would neither be necessary nor plausible.
Instead
,
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people
should pay attention to how they
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use
their device in
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public
places
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so
that they can benefit from it without disturbing others.
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IELTS academic Opinions are divided on whether phones should be strictly prohibited in public spaces such as libraries, shops or public transport.

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