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The pie charts illustrate electricity use by various fields in Eastern Australia between the years 2007 and 2010.

The pie charts illustrate electricity use by various fields in Eastern Australia between the years 2007 and 2010. lLmyD
The pie charts illustrates the data about the proportion expenditure of electricity by eight catogaries differences in stern Australia between 2007 and 2010. Overall, the figure of used electricity in residental account for the highest in both two years. In addition, people consumed similar percentage of their budget on the remaining transport and agriculture. In 2007, people in Eastern Australia comsumed on residental and comercial were exactly the same in both years, at 28% and 23%, respectively. Likewise, the proportion of mining and transport at 9% and 1% for electricity use in two years which were shown of total expenditure, but the lowest. The percentage of electricity used by aluminlum at 13% in 2007, whil15e their expenditure fell to 11% in 2010. 13% of electricity in 2007 were to used in Eastern Australia, and this reducted only 9% after three years since then. By contrast, there was a increase in other metals, which went up from 12% in 2007 to 18% in 2010.
The pie charts illustrates the data about the proportion expenditure of
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differences in stern Australia between 2007 and 2010.
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, the figure of
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account for the highest in both two years.
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consumed similar percentage of their budget on the remaining transport and agriculture.

In 2007,
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in Eastern Australia
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were exactly the same in both years, at 28% and 23%,
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, the proportion of mining and transport at 9% and 1% for
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the lowest.

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aluminlum
at 13% in 2007, whil15e their expenditure fell to 11% in 2010. 13% of
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in 2007 were
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in Eastern Australia, and this
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9% after three years since then. By contrast, there was
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increase in other metals, which went up from 12% in 2007 to 18% in 2010.

IELTS academic The pie charts illustrate electricity use by various fields in Eastern Australia between the years 2007 and 2010.

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