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The pie charts display the percentage of different types of house expense in a nation in 1950 and 2010

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The pie charts display the percentage of different types of house expense in a nation in 1950 and 2010. In 1950, there was nearly three quarters for the expenditure of average Household, while health carr expensed at 2. 4 %. Food was at 1. 2 which was the second Highest percentage for expenditure after housing category. Transportation expensed at 3. 3 % and education was exactly the double percentage of transportation expense with 6. 6%. However there was 4. 4 % in other category expenditure of the household too. In 2010, housing was the most affected category in decline of the expenditure of household from 72. 1 % in 1950 to 22% in 2010. While education category followed the same trend of decrease of 0. 3% from 6. 6% in1950 to 6. 3 in 2010. Whereas other expenses was increase at 19. 2% and transportation expense surged to 14%. while food expense was 34 % which the highest increase in the expenditure of household, however health care expenses was at 4. 5%.
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from 72. 1 % in 1950 to 22% in 2010.
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IELTS academic The pie charts display the percentage of different types of house expense in a nation in 1950 and 2010

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