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The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors. BoqV
The pie charts give information about a survey to tourists that visited Bowen Island regarding its disadvantaging and encouraging factors that commonly influenced them during their stay. Overall, the aspect that attracted most of the visitors was the island’s people while the high cost of living in the island was picked up by the most surveyed as the negative point of the place. On contrary, the least disadvantage of the island, according to the survey, was the weather while good accommodation answered as the least strong point of the island. The most common attracting factor for the tourist to visit Bowen Island was its people with 42% responses compared to half of the responders answered the island’s most disadvantage factor was its expensive living cost. Meanwhile, 35% of the responders said that the island’s scenery was good but 25% of them responded that its entertainment was not satisfying. On the other hand, only 11% of the visitors said that the island’s hotels and other accommodations was beneficial while 10% of them gave feedback that its food quality was not good. In addition, there were 12% of the tourists answered that the island’s culture was attracting and there were 10% of them said the weather on the island was bad.
The pie charts give information about a survey to tourists that visited Bowen
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regarding its disadvantaging and encouraging factors that
commonly
influenced them during their stay.
Overall
, the aspect that attracted most of the visitors was the
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island’s
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people
while the high cost of living in the
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island
was picked
up by the most surveyed as the
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negative
point of the place. On contrary, the least disadvantage of the
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island
, according to the survey, was the weather while
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good
accommodation answered as the least strong point of the island.

The most common attracting factor for the tourist to visit Bowen
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Island
was its
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people
with 42% responses compared to half of the responders answered the
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island’s
most disadvantage factor was its expensive living cost. Meanwhile, 35% of the responders said that the
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island’s
scenery was
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good
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but
25% of them responded that its entertainment was not satisfying.

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11% of the visitors said that the
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island’s
hotels and other accommodations was beneficial while 10% of them gave feedback that its food quality was not
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good
.
In addition
, there were 12% of the tourists answered that the
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island’s
culture was attracting and there were 10% of them said the weather on the
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island
was
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bad
.
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen Island, according to a survey of visitors.

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6.5
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