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The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016. Dmmp
The pie charts represent the amount of revenue sources and expenditures in the year 2016 for kids charity in the USA. As meticulously shown in the charts, at the beginning of the period investment income was contributed least portion, while, donated food was most significant revenue. In comparison, in expenditures section program services became major part as well as management and general was lowest section at the end of the period. Firstly, revenue source of investment income was accounted 0. 2%. Whereas, management and general was generated 1. 6% in expenditure sector. To following these, other income sources slightly increased to 0. 4%, likewise, there was a bit growth in the proportion of fundraising in expenditures around 2. 6%. In the same vein, program revenue source was risen to 2. 2% and community contributions rose to 10. 4% the second highest fraction in revenue sources. On contrary, there was a mass percentage reported for donated food approximately 86. 6%. Oppositely, in expenditures program services consist of major contribution rather than other sources around 95. 8%. To conclude, Although, school charity had huge revenue sources, expenditures also highly reported in 2016.
The pie charts represent the amount of
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sources
and
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expenditures
in the year 2016 for kids charity in the USA.

As
meticulously
shown in the charts, at the beginning of the period investment income
was contributed
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least
portion, while, donated food was
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most
significant
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revenue
.
In comparison
, in
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expenditures
section program services became major part
as well
as management and general was
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lowest
section at the
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end
of the period.
Firstly
,
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revenue
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source
of investment income
was accounted
0. 2%. Whereas, management and general
was generated
1. 6% in
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expenditure
sector. To following these, other income
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sources
slightly
increased to 0. 4%,
likewise
, there was a
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bit
growth in the proportion of fundraising in
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expenditures
around 2. 6%.

In the same vein, program
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revenue
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source
was risen
to 2. 2% and community contributions rose to 10. 4% the second highest fraction in
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revenue
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sources
. On contrary, there was a mass percentage reported for donated food approximately 86. 6%.
Oppositely
, in
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expenditures
program services consist of major contribution
rather
than other
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sources
around 95. 8%.

To conclude
, Although, school charity had huge
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revenue
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sources
,
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expenditures
also
highly
reported in 2016.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

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6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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