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The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

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The given couple of pie charts reveal us the proportion of different variants of energy production of France in the time period 1995-2005 Generally speaking, France mainly produces energy by 4 different kinds of sources, namely coal, gas, nuclear energy and petroleum. They also have a negligible amount of energy produced from other sources of energy. In the given pie charts, comparing the individual contribution of each source of energy, we can witness that in year 1995 the production of energy via coal, petroleum and gas was very close to 30%, Then in the year 2005 production due coal and gas slightly edged up by 1% where production due petroleum marginally decreased by 10%. Finally, the production of energy due to nuclear energy and other sources increased by 4% approximately
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energy
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of France in the time period 1995-2005

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speaking, France
mainly
produces
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energy
by 4
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different
kinds of
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sources
,
namely
coal, gas, nuclear
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energy
and petroleum. They
also
have a negligible amount of
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energy
produced from other
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sources
of energy.

In the
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given
pie charts, comparing the individual contribution of each
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source
of
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energy
, we can witness that in year 1995 the
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production
of
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energy
via coal, petroleum and gas was
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very
close to 30%, Then in the year 2005
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production
due coal and gas
slightly
edged up by 1% where
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production
due petroleum
marginally
decreased by 10%.
Finally
, the
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production
of
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energy
due to nuclear
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energy
and other
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sources
increased by 4% approximately
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the comparison of different kinds of energy production of France in two years

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