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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts compare the average household payments in Japan and Malaysia in terms of five important categories during the 2010. It is clear from the charts that while the tendencies were almost the same in both countries, there were some differences in the percentage. Housing is the most expensive thing in Malaysia, which makes up 34% of the expenditures. This category in Japan takes the 3rd place and makes up 21% of the spending. Food payments’ percentage is very similar and composes 24% in Japan and 27% in Malaysia. Food payments are one of the biggest in both countries. The proportion of transportation in Japan makes up 20% of the overall household expenditures. This is 10% higher than the same category in Malaysia. The lowest group of spending is the health care, which totals 6% in Japan and only 3% in Malaysia. Speaking about the proportion of other goods and services, it is the largest category in Japan and it composed 29% in 2010. In Malaysia it was 26% as well.
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during the 2010.

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from the charts that while the tendencies were almost the same in both countries, there were
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differences in the percentage.

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up 34% of the expenditures. This
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takes the 3rd place and
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up 21% of the spending. Food payments’ percentage is
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similar and composes 24% in
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and 27% in Malaysia. Food payments are one of the biggest in both countries. The proportion of transportation in
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Japan
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up 20% of the
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household expenditures. This is 10% higher than the same
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in Malaysia. The lowest group of spending is the health care, which totals 6% in
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Japan
and
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3% in Malaysia. Speaking about the proportion of other
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goods
and services, it is the largest
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in
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Japan
and it composed 29% in 2010. In
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

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