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The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995.

The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995. rP7o
The given pie charts compare the women’s top education level in two different years, 1945 and 1995, in Someland. As is presented in the given illustration, Someland’s women did a remarkable progress in education in 1995 than that of 1945. According to the given illustration, the highest level of education among women in Someland has a far worse situation than that of 1995. In 1945, 35% women in Someland had no schooling while 35% had only upto third grade education. 15% of those women went to school and completed 6 year education while 10% finished schools up to 9 years. 12 year education was completed only by 4% women in this year while only 1% completed first degree. No women in this year in Someland finished their post graduation. On the other hand, the highest education level among women in Someland improved significantly with 50% first degree holders and 20% post graduates and 20% 12 years degree holders. The percentage of Someland’s women who did not complete school education reduced dramatically in this year and this is a sure sign of improved women education in Someland.
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in 1995 than that of 1945.

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has a far worse situation than that of 1995. In 1945, 35%
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had no schooling while 35% had
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. 15% of those
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while 10% finished schools up to 9 years. 12
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was completed
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IELTS academic The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995.

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