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The line chart provides information about population size( in million) and also compared the birth and mortality rates(per 1000 people) in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.

The line chart provides information about population size( in million) and also compared the birth and mortality rates(per 1000 people) in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Ebxx
The line chart provides information about population size( in million) and also compared the birth and mortality rates(per 1000 people) in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Overall, the population size were recorded sharply increase, while the birth and the mortality rates have eccentric trend between 1700 and 2000. In 17000, the population size started about 2. 5 million, after that increased rapidly to 10 million in 1750, although the size of citizens, from 1750 to 1800 remained stable, but after that rose dramatically to 50 million in 2000. Meanwhile, the birth rate is considerable high to their population was reached 30 million in 1700 and then has high of fluctuation, in 2002 the birth rates was approximately 34%. While, the death rates was similar to birth trend, in 1700 the mortality at about 27 million, despite of their oscillation from 1700 to 1950, but it is platitude at 20 million in 2002.
The line chart provides information about
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birth
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people
) in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.

Overall
, the
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population
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size
were recorded
sharply
increase, while the
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birth
and the mortality
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rates
have eccentric trend between 1700 and 2000.

In 17000, the
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population
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size
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started
about 2. 5
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million
, after that increased
rapidly
to 10
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million
in 1750, although the
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size
of citizens, from 1750 to 1800 remained stable,
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after that rose
dramatically
to 50
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million
in 2000. Meanwhile, the
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birth
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rate
is considerable high to their
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population
was reached
30
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million
in 1700 and then has high of fluctuation, in 2002 the
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birth
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rates
was approximately 34%.

While, the death
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was similar to
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birth
trend, in 1700 the mortality at about 27
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million
,
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their oscillation from 1700 to 1950,
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million
in 2002.
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IELTS academic The line chart provides information about population size( in million) and also compared the birth and mortality rates(per 1000 people) in England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.

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