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The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

The pie chart shows the national expenditure of the United Arab Emirates government in 2000. Generally speaking, the UAE government had a budget of over 300 billion AED and the highest portion of this budget was spent on social security and health & social services. As is given in the diagram, the UAE government spent more than 300 billion AED in ten different sectors in 2000. Social security for the citizens cost the highest budget and it was exactly 100 billion AED. Health and personal social services, on the other hand, required more than 50 billion and this was the second largest budget money allocation for the UAE government in 2000. The UAE authority used 38 billion for education, 17 billion for law and order and 13 billion for job, industry and agriculture. Defence sector cost them 22 billion which was slightly lower than the debt interests the government paid in this year. Housing, heritage and environment got 15 billion which was nearly the same as it was allocated for law and order. Finally, 9 billion was spent on the transportation sector and 23 million for other sectors which are not specifically mentioned in the chart.
The pie chart
shows
the national expenditure of the United Arab Emirates
government
in 2000.
Generally
speaking, the UAE
government
had a
budget
of over 300
billion
AED and the highest portion of this
budget
was spent
on
social
security and health &
social
services.

As is
given
in the diagram, the UAE
government
spent more than 300
billion
AED in ten
different
sectors
in 2000.
Social
security for the citizens cost the highest
budget and
it was exactly 100
billion
AED. Health and personal
social
services,
on the other hand
, required more than 50
billion
and this was the second largest
budget
money allocation for the UAE
government
in 2000. The UAE authority
used
38
billion
for education, 17
billion
for law and order and 13
billion
for job, industry and agriculture.
Defence
sector
cost them 22
billion
which was
slightly
lower than the debt interests the
government
paid in this year. Housing, heritage and environment
got
15
billion
which was
nearly
the same as it
was allocated
for law and order.
Finally
, 9
billion
was spent
on the transportation
sector
and 23 million for other
sectors
which are not
specifically
mentioned in the chart.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest.

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