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The pie chart shows the intake of nutrients by an average american

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The pie chart illustrates the percentage of daily intake of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar consumed in meals by an average American citizen. Overall, the chart reveals that the breakfast and the lunch consumed by an average American can be considered a balanced diet. However, the dinner might contain a heavy amount of sodium and saturated fat. Meanwhile, the snacks have a high amount of added sugar. The overdose of some nutrients might be unhealthy. In the breakfast, an average American consumes about 14% of sodium, 16% each of saturated fat, and added sugar respectively. Moreover, lunch contains 29% of sodium, 26% of saturated fat, and 19% of added sugar. As the chart projects, the dinner contains around 43% of sodium, 37% of saturated fat, and around 23% of added sugar. At last the snacks of average American contains about 14% of sodium, 21% of saturated fat, and approximately 42% of added sugar
The pie chart illustrates the percentage of daily intake of sodium,

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Overall
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Meanwhile, the snacks have a high amount of
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nutrients might be unhealthy.

In the breakfast, an
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American consumes about 14% of sodium, 16% each of
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29% of sodium, 26% of
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fat
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sugar.

As the chart projects, the dinner
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around 43% of sodium, 37% of
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saturated
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, and around 23% of
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added
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At last the snacks of
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