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The pie chart shows, the average proportion of three nutrients in four meals consumed in U.S.A.

The pie chart shows, the average proportion of three nutrients in four meals consumed in U. S. A. 5oKD
The chart illustrates, the average proportion of three nutrients mainly sodium, saturated fat and added sugar in four meals consumed in U. S. A. Overall, when we compare, it is evident that, sodium and saturated fat are consumed maximum in dinner, while added sugar is taken in higher quantity in snacks. Additionally, the proportion of all three nutrients are more or less same in breakfast. Firstly, 43% of sodium and 37% of saturated fat were eaten by people of USA during dinner, which is dramatically highest proportion, whereas 23% added sugar was taken in dinner. However, 42% of added sugar was consumed in snacks. The proportion of sodium and saturated fat in snacks is 14% and 21% respectively. Finally, consumption of sodium in lunch is 29% which is 10% more than that of added sugar. Moreover, 26% of saturated sugat was used in lunch. Furthermore, all three nutrients are used marginally in the breakfast which constitute 14% of sodium and 16% each of saturated fat and added sugar.
The chart illustrates, the average
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proportion
of three nutrients
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sodium,
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saturated
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fat
and
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added
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sugar
in four meals consumed in U. S. A.

Overall
, when we compare, it is evident that, sodium and
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saturated
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fat
are consumed
maximum in dinner, while
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added
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sugar
is taken
in higher quantity in snacks.
Additionally
, the
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proportion
of all three nutrients are more or less same in breakfast.

Firstly
, 43% of sodium and 37% of
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saturated
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fat
were eaten
by
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people
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of USA
during dinner, which is
dramatically
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highest
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proportion
, whereas 23%
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added
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sugar
was taken
in dinner.
However
, 42% of
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added
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sugar
was consumed
in snacks. The
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proportion
of sodium and
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saturated
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fat
in snacks is 14% and 21%
respectively
.

Finally
, consumption of sodium in lunch is 29% which is 10% more than that of
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added
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sugar
.
Moreover
, 26% of
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saturated
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sugat
was
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used
in lunch.
Furthermore
, all three nutrients are
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used
marginally
in the breakfast which constitute 14% of sodium and 16% each of
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saturated
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fat
and
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added
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sugar
.
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IELTS academic The pie chart shows, the average proportion of three nutrients in four meals consumed in U. S. A.

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