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The pie chart indicates the production of energy in France over a period for 10 years (1995-2005).

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The pie chart indicates the production of energy in France over a period for 10 years (1995-2005). Overall, the percentage coal produced was by far the highest. In constrast, the proportion of the other energy production was the lowest during the research period. Between 1995 and 2005, there was a slight increase in the proportion of coal production, from 29, 8% to 30, 9%. During the same period, the rate of gas energy production rose minimally by approximately 0, 68%. Moreover, in 1995, the level of the other production accounted for roughly 4. 9%, which was a-twice than that in 2005. The percentage of petrol produced saw a significant decline over 10 years, from 29, 27% in 1995 to 19, 55 in 2005. Furthermore, the figure for nuclear category made up 6, 40%, which was considerably lower than that in 2005, around 10, 10%. While there was an downward trend in petrol production, an upward trend could be seen in the other four criteria
The pie chart indicates the
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of energy in France over a period for 10 years (1995-2005).

Overall
, the percentage coal produced was by far the highest. In
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, the proportion of the other energy
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was the lowest during the research period.

Between 1995 and 2005, there was a slight increase in the proportion of coal
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, from 29, 8% to 30, 9%. During the same period, the rate of gas energy
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rose
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by approximately 0, 68%.
Moreover
, in 1995, the level of the other
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accounted for roughly 4. 9%, which was a-twice than that in 2005.

The percentage of petrol produced
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a significant decline over 10 years, from 29, 27% in 1995 to 19, 55 in 2005.
Furthermore
, the figure for nuclear category made up 6, 40%, which was
considerably
lower than that in 2005, around 10, 10%. While there was
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an
downward trend in petrol
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, an upward trend could be
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in the other four
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criteria

IELTS academic The pie chart indicates the production of energy in France over a period for 10 years (1995-2005).

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