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The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. 5jkm
The pie chart illustrates the proportion of people living in Australia with different nationalities, while the table indicates the distribution of these people in cities and rural areas. Overall, it can be seen that the majority of Australia’s population was born in this country. In addition, most of people in Australia live in urban areas. As can be seen from the pie chart, Australia accounted for the greatest percentage of 73%, which is about 7 times higher than that of the UK. It is noticeable that the people who were born in New Zealand, China and Netherlands merely made up small proportions, with 1%, 2% and 3% respectively. Besides, nearly one-fourth of Australia’s population come from other countries. Moving on, UK and Netherlands share the same percentage of people living in rural areas, with about 10%, which is double that of New Zealand. Surprisingly, while the figure for Australian living in cities is only 83%, that of Chinese constitute exactly 99%.
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Overall
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that the majority of Australia’s population
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from the pie chart, Australia accounted for the greatest percentage of 73%, which is about 7 times higher than that of the UK. It is noticeable that the
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who
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in New Zealand, China and Netherlands
merely
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small
proportions, with 1%, 2% and 3%
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nearly
one-fourth of Australia’s population
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come
from other countries.

Moving on, UK and Netherlands share the same percentage of
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people
living in rural areas, with about 10%, which is double that of New Zealand.
Surprisingly
, while the figure for Australian living in cities is
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83%, that of Chinese constitute exactly 99%.
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IELTS academic The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

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6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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