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The given bar chart below show the result of survey conducted by a personal department at a major company the survey was carried out on two groups of workers :those age from 18-30 and those aged 45-60 and shows factors affecting on their performance.

The given bar chart below show the result of survey conducted by a personal department at a major company the survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those age from 18-30 and those aged 45-60 and shows factors affecting on their performance. rPDo

The given bar chart illustrates that major company conducted for survey for personal department. Employee of two groups was carried the survey, first group aged was 18-30 and second group aged of 45-60. There are many different type of component affected on their operation. As can be clearly seen that, One of the most affected reason for first group workers were opportunity for personal growth about 90 percent and one of the lowest affected factors was work environment which was about 30 percent. Observing further, Team spirit had similarly affected factor on both groups nearly 60 percent. relaxed working environment and promotion are equally affected reason for first group. Money was the most affected reason for second group.

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given
 bar chart illustrates that major This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 conducted for survey for Did you mean the noun "personnel"?personnel
personal
 department. Employee of two You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
groups
was carried
 the survey, first
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group
 aged was 18-30 and second You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
group
 aged of 45-60. There are This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
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different
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affected
 on their operation. As can be clearly
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seen
 that, One of the most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withimpresseddistressedconcerneddamagedtouchedtroubled
affected
 reason for first
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group
 workers were opportunity for personal growth about 90 percent and one of the lowest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withimpresseddistressedconcerneddamagedtouchedtroubled
affected
 factors was work environment which was about 30 percent. Observing further
, Team spirit had similarly
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affected
 factor on both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
groups
nearly
 60 percent. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterRelaxed
relaxed
 working environment and promotion are equally
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affected
 reason for first
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group
. Money was the most You use this word too often, consider replacing it withimpresseddistressedconcerneddamagedtouchedtroubled
affected
 reason for second You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
group
. 