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The given bar chart below show the result of survey conducted by a personal department at a major company the survey was carried out on two groups of workers :those age from 18-30 and those aged 45-60 and shows factors affecting on their performance.

The given bar chart below show the result of survey conducted by a personal department at a major company the survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those age from 18-30 and those aged 45-60 and shows factors affecting on their performance. rPDo
The given bar chart illustrates that major company conducted for survey for personal department. Employee of two groups was carried the survey, first group aged was 18-30 and second group aged of 45-60. There are many different type of component affected on their operation. As can be clearly seen that, One of the most affected reason for first group workers were opportunity for personal growth about 90 percent and one of the lowest affected factors was work environment which was about 30 percent. Observing further, Team spirit had similarly affected factor on both groups nearly 60 percent. relaxed working environment and promotion are equally affected reason for first group. Money was the most affected reason for second group.
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conducted for survey for
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department. Employee of two
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aged was 18-30 and second
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aged of 45-60. There are
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type of component
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that, One of the most
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reason for
first
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workers were opportunity for personal growth about 90 percent and one of the lowest
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affected
factors was work environment which was about 30 percent. Observing
further
, Team spirit had
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affected
factor on both
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nearly
60 percent.
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relaxed
working environment and promotion are
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reason for
first
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. Money was the most
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IELTS academic The given bar chart below show the result of survey conducted by a personal department at a major company the survey was carried out on two groups of workers: those age from 18-30 and those aged 45-60 and shows factors affecting on their performance.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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