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The pie chart gives information about Britain

The pie chart gives information about Britain JlRl6
The pie chart gives information about the percentage of student of Britain at one university of England, who could communicate in in varied languages along with English in 2 years, particularly, 2000 and 2010 As an overview it is limpid that in the first annum, namely, 2000, the majority of learners in Britain were capable of speaking in Spanish more as of any other speech. Whilst in the period 2010 similar percentum of students in Britain was proficient in conversing in French, German and category mentioned as, no other language. At a glance, is evident that initially in the year 2006 significant proportion of students word well versed in Spanish than other specified languages apart from English, the data was 30%. This was followed by category highlighted as no other language and further with, French and other medium of tongue, the figure for the the former was 10% less than the statistics of Spanish speakers as well as 15% for Latter, was halved data of most learned language among students of Britain. Thereafter equal percentage of British students had the potential of communicating in German and also in two other tongues, with merely 10% figure. The most striking feature that is illustrated in second chart of particular year 2000 is that Spanish speakers in Britain increased by 5% more contrary to to earlier years data followed by Bhai and other languages which Rose with 5% data from the previous time. Interestingly, those who were proficient in talking in in two other languages also reached at 15%. Surprisingly, the percent I'm of no other language French only and German remained at statistics with just 10%
The pie chart gives information about the percentage of
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student
of Britain at one university of England, who could communicate
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varied
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languages
along with English in 2 years,
particularly
, 2000 and 2010

As an overview it is limpid that in the
first
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,
namely
, 2000, the majority of learners in Britain were capable of speaking in Spanish more
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as
of any
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other
speech. Whilst in the period 2010 similar
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percentum
of
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students
in Britain was proficient
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in conversing in
French, German and category mentioned as, no
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other
language.

At a glance, is evident that
initially
in the
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year
2006 significant proportion of
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students
word well versed in
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Spanish
than
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other
specified
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languages
apart from English, the
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data
was 30%. This
was followed
by category highlighted as no
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other
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language
and
further
with, French and
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other
medium of tongue, the figure for
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the the
former was 10% less than the statistics of Spanish speakers
as well
as 15% for Latter,
was halved
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data
of most learned
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language
among
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students
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equal percentage of British
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students
had the potential of communicating in German and
also
in two
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other
tongues, with
merely
10% figure.

The most striking feature that
is illustrated
in second chart of particular
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year
2000 is that Spanish speakers in Britain increased by 5% more contrary
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to to
earlier years
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data
followed by
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Bhai
and
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other
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languages
which Rose with 5%
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data
from the previous time.
Interestingly
, those who were proficient in talking
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two
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other
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languages
also
reached at 15%.
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, the percent I'm of no
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other
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language
French
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10%

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