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The pie chart below shows the information about the proportion of people spending on different commodities and service in European in 1998 and 2008

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The given diagram demonstrate about the proportion of people’s spending on different commodities and services in European nation in 1998 and 2008 Overall, the two pie chart obination about the proportion of people’s spending in 1998 and 2008. The pie chart in 1998 is split to six part, the highest percent is clothing with 32% and the lowest is luxury food with 7%. The next, in the pie chart in 2008, the percentage of clothing is rapid decrease and housing become the highest with 32%, the luxury food is increase with 17% so transport is the lowest with 6%. In conclusion, the percentage of six part is rapid up and down, it’s the change of people about the proportion they want.
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commodities and services in European nation in 1998 and 2008

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, in the pie chart in 2008, the percentage of clothing is rapid decrease and housing become the highest with 32%, the luxury food is increase with 17%
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transport is the lowest with 6%.

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, the percentage of six part is rapid up and down, it’s the
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about the proportion they want.
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows the information about the proportion of people spending on different commodities and service in European in 1998 and 2008

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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