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The graphs show the changes in the amount of confectionary export in Iran between 2005 and 2010

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The given visuals illustrate the percentage of changes in exporting confectionary in Iran from 2005 to 2010. It can be seen in 2005 Denmarki constituted the most numerial followed by Baasloq. However after 5 years Denmarki experienced a marked fall whereas, Baasloq experienced the highest amount. Denmarki was accounted the most percent just over two fifths followed by Baasloq just over a third in 2005. After 5 years Baasloq constituted the greatest amount more than four in ten. In compared to 5 years ago Baasloq grew considerably while Denmarki decreased enormousely a quarters. Muffin and Keyk Yazdi on the whole were contained a quarters of exporting toother nations in 2005. After half a decade, it was interesting due to the fact that Muffin had the same quantity with on in twenty however, Keyk Yazdi jumped hugely just below one third in comparison with 2005. All in all whole stuff rose tremendously over 5 year period of time except Muffin and Denmarki.
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changes
in exporting confectionary in Iran from 2005 to 2010. It can be
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seen
in 2005
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Denmarki
constituted the most
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numerial
followed by
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Baasloq
.
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However
after 5 years
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Denmarki
experienced a marked fall whereas,
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Baasloq
experienced the highest amount.

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Denmarki
was accounted
the most percent
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just
over two fifths followed by
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Baasloq
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just
over a third in 2005.
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After
5 years
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Baasloq
constituted the greatest amount more than four in ten. In compared to 5 years ago
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Baasloq
grew
considerably
while
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Denmarki
decreased
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enormousely
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a quarters
.

Muffin and
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Keyk
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Yazdi
on the whole
were contained
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a quarters
of exporting
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toother
nations in 2005. After half a decade, it was interesting due to the fact that Muffin had the same quantity with on in twenty
however
,
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Keyk
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Yazdi
jumped
hugely
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just
below one third
in comparison
with 2005.

All in all whole stuff rose
tremendously
over 5
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year
period of time except Muffin and
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Denmarki
.

IELTS academic The graphs show the changes in the amount of confectionary export in Iran between 2005 and 2010

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