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The pie chart below shows market distribution and classification of Canadian Steel shipments in terms of percentages of total shipments for the year 2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given pie chart provides information about the proportion of distribution and division of Canadian Steel Shipments throughout the market in 2006. To begin with, the highest part of the chart is covered by export category, while, the smallest was by Wire and wire products which required 2. 0% of total Canadian Steep Shipments. Moreover, the export, and steel Services Centres, other wholesaler covers 2/4th of the total shipments. In addition to it, Motor vehicles and parts made 15. 4%, while, pipes and tubes was 13. 3 % but combined both gives approximately 30 percent of the shipment. On the other hand, Shipping, Pressing and coating, contractors products and Steel fabrication mergely gives approximately 12 percent, while the individual -percentage was 2. 80, 3. 4, and 5. 6 percent respectively. However, the other sector covered 5. 2 percent of the total. Overall, the data indicates that export Sector was highest, whereas the wire and wire products was least in total Canadian shipments in 2006
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throughout the market in 2006.

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products which required 2. 0% of total Canadian Steep
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mergely
gives approximately 12
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, while the individual -percentage was 2. 80, 3. 4, and 5. 6
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respectively
.
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, the other sector covered 5. 2
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Overall
, the data indicates that export Sector was highest, whereas the
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wire
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products was least in total Canadian
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shipments
in 2006
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IELTS academic The pie chart below shows market distribution and classification of Canadian Steel shipments in terms of percentages of total shipments for the year 2006.

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