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The given bar chart depicts the proportion of United Kingdom who ate how much fruit and vegetable in the years 2002 , 2006 and 2010.

The given bar chart depicts the proportion of United Kingdom who ate how much fruit and vegetable in the years 2002, 2006 and 2010. BMLM6
Overall, at the beginning of the period the percentage of women who consumed the fruit and vegetable was higher than men and children. Also, at the end of the period the women remained namely at the same level. In 2002, more than 20% of men who consumed 22% of fruit and vegetable and this trend for women is higher with a quarter. However, the proportion of children in UK who ate the fruit as well as vegetable was less than other, only at 11%. For next 4 years, their index showed an upward trend. After that, 25% of woman who ate the fruit rose by 4%, just over 30% of woman increased by 7% and children came to 18%. Furthermore, they decreased again until 2010. I can be seen that they who ate the fruit and vegetable showed 24%, 26%, and 16% respectively.
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, at the beginning of the period the percentage of women
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consumed the
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and
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vegetable
was higher than
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men
and children.
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, at the
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end
of the period the women remained
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at the same level.

In 2002, more than 20% of
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men
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who
consumed 22% of
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fruit
and
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vegetable
and this trend for women is higher with a quarter.
However
, the proportion of children in UK
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who
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the
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fruit
as well
as
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was less than other,
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only
at 11%.

For
next
4 years, their index
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showed
an upward trend. After that, 25% of woman
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who
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ate
the
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fruit
rose by 4%,
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over 30% of woman increased by 7% and children came to 18%.
Furthermore
, they decreased again until 2010. I can be
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seen
that they
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ate
the
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and
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vegetable
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showed
24%, 26%, and 16%
respectively
.
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IELTS academic The given bar chart depicts the proportion of United Kingdom who ate how much fruit and vegetable in the years 2002, 2006 and 2010.

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143 words
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