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The pictures illustrate changes which have taken place in a particular art gallery from 2005 to the present.

The pictures illustrate changes which have taken place in a particular art gallery from 2005 to the present. 7rJ9y
The given pictures show the changes of ground floor in a particular art gallery over the period from 2005 to present day. Overall, it can be seen that the main changes have been the use of the west side for other purposes and the addition of some new facilities. According to the first map, visitors could enter the hall through the entrance in the south of the building. Inside the hall, there was a reception desk to welcome visitors, which led to a staircase in the north end. There were three different exhibition rooms 1, 2 and 3 which were on the Eastern wing. The remaining exhibition were the biggest room and located to the left-hand side of the floor. Meanwhile, the cafe and gallery office took up entire northwest corner. At present, the entrance remains the same at the middle of the southern wall, and there is a new ramp for wheel chair outside the establishment. The receptionist is moved to nearer space with the entrance hall and a new lift was constructed next to the stairs. To the west, exhibition room 4 is converted into a children’s indoor playground and a room for temporary display, while a gallery shop and a vending machine are erected to replace the original gallery office and the cafe. However, the three exhibition rooms on the right-hand side remain unchanged.
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ground floor
in a particular art
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gallery
over the period from 2005 to present day.

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, it can be
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seen
that the main
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changes
have been the
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use
of the west side for other purposes and the addition of
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some
new facilities.

According to the
first
map, visitors could enter the hall through the entrance in the south of the building. Inside the hall, there was a reception desk to welcome visitors, which led to a staircase in the north
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end
. There were three
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different
exhibition
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rooms
1, 2 and 3 which were on the Eastern wing. The remaining exhibition were the biggest
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room
and located to the
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left
-hand side of the floor. Meanwhile, the
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cafe
and
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gallery
office took up entire northwest corner.

At present, the entrance remains the same at the middle of the southern wall, and there is a new ramp for wheel chair outside the establishment. The receptionist is
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moved
to nearer space with the entrance hall and a new lift
was constructed
next
to the stairs. To the west, exhibition
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room
4
is converted
into a children’s indoor playground and a
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room
for temporary display, while a
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gallery
shop and a vending machine
are erected
to replace the original
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gallery
office and the
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cafe
.
However
, the three exhibition
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rooms
on the right-hand side remain unchanged.
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IELTS academic The pictures illustrate changes which have taken place in a particular art gallery from 2005 to the present.

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