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The picture illustrates the transformation of the sports center in a university.

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The picture illustrates the transformation of the sports center in a university. It is clear from the maps that the center is likely to undergo some remarkable changes and the building will be expanded and more developed with the introduction of additional facilities. Looking at the first map, at present, there are two outdoor courts on the east and west side and the buiding is in the middle of the center. To the proposal plan, the structure inside the building including the 25m pool, changing room and seating still remains unchanged, also the reception at the front. The only exception is that the gym in the northern part will be lengthened eastwards. In the layout after renovation, they intend to remove the outside court in the west of building and develop a leisure pool, while the eastern one will be replaced by a sports hall next to the seating with the emergence of two adjacent dance studios. They will also build two changing room in the southeast and northwest conner of the buiding. There is a new abutiing sports shop next to the westernmost room and a cafe will open beside the one.
The picture illustrates the transformation of the sports center in a university.

It is
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clear
from the maps that the center is likely to undergo
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some
remarkable
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changes
and the building will
be expanded
and more developed with the introduction of additional facilities.

Looking at the
first
map, at present, there are two outdoor courts on the east and west side and the
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buiding
is in the middle of the center. To the proposal plan, the structure inside the building including the
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25m
pool, changing room and seating
still
remains unchanged,
also
the reception at the front. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
exception is that the gym in the northern part will
be lengthened
eastwards.

In the layout after renovation, they intend to remove the outside court in the west of building and develop a leisure pool, while the eastern one will
be replaced
by a sports hall
next
to the seating with the emergence of two adjacent dance studios. They will
also
build two changing room in the southeast and northwest
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conner
of the
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buiding
. There is a new
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abutiing
sports shop
next
to the westernmost room and a
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
will open beside the one.

IELTS academic The picture illustrates the transformation of the sports center in a university.

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