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The picture illustrates the process of making fruit cans.

The picture illustrates the process of making fruit cans. Q83xK
The given flow chart details the specific stages of the production process of canned fruits. Among the procedures begins with picking better-quality fruits, which ends with transporting to the supermarket and putting them on the shelf for sale. More specifically, as noted at the initial stage, picking fruits is the first task to deal with, transferring to the factory, and starting sorting jobs so as to distinguish whether the materials are suitable for production. After cooling in the storage which is severely controlled at 10 degrees Celsius, they are washed for sanitation. Following this, the fruit is then weighed and graded to remove poor quality ones. Qualified fruit is then peeled and sliced into pieces, with the core being removed. Moreover, after separating them into two pieces, these pieces are converted into juice or syrup by automatic robotic arms. Afterwards, cans are sealed to prevent outer air from getting into containers and influencing the contents. Ensuing cooking and sterilizing in order to kill the bacterium, they are cooled down in pears. Ultimately, those final fruit tins are packed and put on trucks which distribute them to the supermarket.
The
given
flow chart
details
the specific stages of the production process of canned
fruits
. Among the procedures
begins
with picking better-quality
fruits
, which ends with transporting to the supermarket and putting them on the shelf for sale.

More
specifically
, as noted at the initial stage, picking
fruits
is the
first
task to deal with, transferring to the factory, and starting sorting jobs
so as to
distinguish whether the materials are suitable for production. After cooling in the storage which is
severely
controlled at 10 degrees Celsius, they
are washed
for sanitation. Following this, the
fruit
is then weighed and graded to remove poor quality ones. Qualified
fruit
is then peeled and sliced into pieces, with the core
being removed
.

Moreover
, after separating them into two pieces, these pieces
are converted
into juice or syrup by automatic robotic arms. Afterwards, cans
are sealed
to
prevent
outer air from getting into containers and influencing the contents. Ensuing cooking and sterilizing in order to kill the bacterium, they
are cooled
down in pears.
Ultimately
, those final
fruit
tins
are packed
and put on trucks which distribute them to the supermarket.

IELTS academic The picture illustrates the process of making fruit cans.

Academic
  American English
3 paragraphs
188 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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