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The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon. MXwo
The diagram illustrates the life circle of the salmon. The salmon lays its eggs in upper river where the water slowly moves. All of eggs will be cover by reeds and small stones for five to six months. After which the eggs hatch into “fry”, which are three to eight centimeters lengths. These “fry” lives in lower fast flowing river for next four years. In the next stage of life cycle, the “fry” grow bigger, and called smolt. Their size are big almost twice as much as fry, which are twelve to fifteen centimeters lengths. Then they keep moving further down river into the open sea to live next five years. Eventually, the salmon attains its full size of 70-76cm in the ocean. After stay there for five years, the salmon swims back to its birthplace to lay their eggs and die. And the life cycle starts again.
The diagram illustrates the life circle of the salmon. The salmon lays its eggs in upper river where the water
slowly
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moves
.
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All of eggs
will be cover by reeds and
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small
stones for five to six months. After which the eggs hatch into “fry”, which are three to eight centimeters lengths. These “fry”
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lives
in lower
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fast
flowing river for
next
four years. In the
next
stage of life cycle, the “fry” grow bigger, and called
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smolt
. Their size
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are
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big
almost twice as much as fry, which are twelve to fifteen centimeters lengths. Then they
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keep
moving
further
down river into the open sea to
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live
next
five years.
Eventually
, the salmon attains its full size of 70
Insert a space between the numerical value and the unit symbol "-76 cm"
-76cm
in the ocean. After stay there for five years, the salmon swims back to its birthplace to lay their eggs and
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die
. And the life cycle
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starts
again.
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IELTS academic The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon.

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  American English
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