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The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007

The graph below shows the consumption of 3 spreads from 1981 to 2007 0rBG
. The rendered line graph illustrates the consumption of different spreads (Margarine, Low fat and reduced spreads, Butter ) between 1981 and 2007. Usually all are measured in grams. Overall, it is conspicuous from the chart that butter was consumed more when compared to the other two types of spread. Explicitly, Butter was consumed more in the year 1986 with the peak record of 160 grams whereas the lowest amount of butter was taken in 2007 which is about 50 grams. Marginally, the consumption of butter plunged from 1991 to 2001. Moreover, the Margarine consumption was similar in all the consecutive years, however there was a decline in the last year. The proportion was almost 100 grams in 1991 and 1996 respectively. Certainly, there was no evidence that people consumed the other spread in first three years (1981, 1986, 1991). Gradually, it was consumed in lower proportions in 1996 and it soared up from 10 to 80 grams in the respective years(1996, 2001). The usage was alleviated in 2007.
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between 1981 and 2007.
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grams
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butter
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consumed
more when compared to the other two types of
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spread
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,
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Butter
was
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consumed
more in the
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year
1986 with the peak record of 160
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grams
whereas the lowest amount of
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butter
was taken
in 2007 which is about 50
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grams
.
Marginally
, the consumption of
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butter
plunged from 1991 to 2001.
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, the Margarine consumption was similar in all the consecutive years,
however
there was a decline in the last
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year
. The proportion was almost 100
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grams
in 1991 and 1996
respectively
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, there was no evidence that
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people
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the other
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in
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three years (1981, 1986, 1991).
Gradually
, it was
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in lower proportions in 1996 and it soared up from 10 to 80
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grams
in the respective years(1996, 2001). The usage
was alleviated
in 2007.
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