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the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia, over a course of thirty, starting from 1980.

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The bar chart gives information about the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia, over a course of thirty, starting from 1980. Overall, a closer look at the bar chart highlights the fact that the percentage of males and females witnessed upward trends. Also, the percentage of males was higher than that of females. Look at the bar chart in more detail, the percentage of males standing at 40% in 1980, after which dropped gradually to 63% in 2000, but later decreased slightly by 4 % in 2010. It can be seen that the percentage of females significantly increased from 31% in 1980 to 52% in 2000 and stay the same until 2010.
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and females who were overweight in Australia, over a course of thirty, starting from 1980.

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, a closer look at the bar chart highlights the fact that the
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percentage
of
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males
and females witnessed upward trends.
Also
, the
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of
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males
was higher than that of females.

Look at the bar chart in more detail, the
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percentage
of
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males
standing at 40% in 1980, after which dropped
gradually
to 63% in 2000,
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later decreased
slightly
by 4 % in 2010.

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seen
that the
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of females
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increased from 31% in 1980 to 52% in 2000 and stay the same until 2010.
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IELTS academic the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia, over a course of thirty, starting from 1980.

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4 paragraphs
116 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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