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the percentage of male graduates going into higher education in five South-East Asian countries in 1999 and 2010

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The bar chart illustrates the percentage of male graduates going into higher education in five South-East Asian countries in 1999 and 2010. The graph shows the percentages in five countries which are Vietnam, Laos, Malaysia, Indonesia, and Thailand. In general, the number of school leavers in these five South-Asian countries was increasing, except in Malaysia. In spite of having the highest number of graduates compared to other countries, Malaysia remained stable with 62% in 1999 and 2010. On the other hand, the least percentage of male students graduating was in Indonesia, with 16% in 1999 and 32% in 2010. There was a significant increase in the percentage of male school leavers in Vietnam, from 35% in 1999 to 55% in 2010. Male graduates who pursued higher educations in Laos also rose 38% in 2010. Indonesia shared the same phenomenon since the number of male graduates was doubled from 16% in 1999 to 32% in 2010.
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going into higher education in five South-East Asian
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in 1999 and 2010. The graph
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in five
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which are Vietnam, Laos, Malaysia, Indonesia, and Thailand.

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was increasing, except in Malaysia.
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, Malaysia remained stable with 62% in 1999 and 2010.
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of male students graduating was in Indonesia, with 16% in 1999 and 32% in 2010.

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who pursued higher educations in Laos
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from 16% in 1999 to 32% in 2010.
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