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The number of the people in the country and the manufacturing

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The diagram provides the information how the tea is produced in step by step. Overall, the process consists of seven stages, starting with harvesting ans ending up with packing as the last stage. In the first stage, the tea is harvested by collectiing only two leaves and one bud from each of the individual tree. After that, moisture in tea leaves are need to be removed under the withering stage. Then the dried leaves are collected and transferred into the roller machine in order to make it into small pieces. In the next stage, leaves will be fermented to proceed oxidisation reaction by exposing it into the air. The oxidized leaves will turned black after fermentation. Following this, the fermentation process is stopped by hot air blow drying. The leaves are then trasfer to seives for grading. Finally, graded leaves are packed in premium aluminium moiteure-proof cases.
The diagram provides the information how the tea
is produced
in step by step.

Overall
, the process consists of seven
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stages
, starting with harvesting ans ending up with packing as the last stage.

In the
first
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stage
, the tea
is harvested
by
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collectiing
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only
two
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leaves
and one bud from each of the individual tree. After that, moisture in tea
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leaves
are need
to
be removed
under the withering
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stage
. Then the dried
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leaves
are collected
and transferred into the roller machine in order to
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make
it into
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small
pieces.

In the
next
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stage
,
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leaves
will
be fermented
to proceed
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oxidisation
reaction by exposing it into the air. The oxidized
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leaves
will turned black after fermentation. Following this, the fermentation process is
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stopped
by hot air
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blow drying
. The
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leaves
are then
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trasfer
to
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seives
for grading.
Finally
, graded
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leaves
are packed
in premium
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aluminium
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moiteure-proof
cases.
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IELTS academic The number of the people in the country and the manufacturing

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
147 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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