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The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park. Jow2w
The two plans illustrate a public park established in 1920 and the same park now. Grange part was built in a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue in the northern direction and from the Eldon street in the southern direction. Likewise, there was a fountain occupying the central area, and a stage for musicians situated at the left side of the fountain. In addition, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon street and a pond for water plants on the northeast corner opposite. Moreover, around the edges of the park, there were rose gardens with seats. On the other hand, the part has altered considerably since then. Now, there is a gigantic rose garden where fountain stood, with seats all around it. Similarly, one of the smaller rose garden remains on the north side of the park. However, the stage for musicians replace by an amphitheatre for the concerts. Subsequently, a water feature adds by superseding a glasshouse and the seats. Following this, a pond for water plants has also been gone and in this place, play area has been built for the children with a cafe nearby. Lastly, though access to the park is still remained via the two authentic entrances, there is now a thrid entrance near to the water feature from an underground car park.
The two plans illustrate a public
park
established in 1920 and the same
park
now
.

Grange part
was built
in a rectangular area with access from Arnold Avenue in the northern direction and from the Eldon street in the southern direction.
Likewise
, there was a fountain occupying the central area, and a stage for musicians situated at the
left
side of the fountain.
In addition
, a glasshouse to the right of the Eldon street and a pond for
water
plants on the northeast corner opposite.
Moreover
, around the edges of the
park
, there were rose gardens with seats.

On the other hand
, the part has altered
considerably
since then.
Now
, there is a gigantic rose garden where fountain stood, with seats all around it.
Similarly
, one of the smaller rose garden remains on the north side of the
park
.
However
, the stage for musicians replace by an
amphitheatre
for the concerts.
Subsequently
, a
water
feature
adds
by superseding a glasshouse and the seats. Following this, a pond for
water
plants has
also
been gone
and in this place, play area has
been built
for the children with a
cafe
nearby.
Lastly
, though access to the
park
is
still
remained via the two authentic entrances, there is
now
a
thrid
entrance near to the
water
feature from an underground car
park
.
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