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The maps show the changes that have taken place at queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

The maps show the changes that have taken place at queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960. 0dBl
The given three maps illustrates the information about the redeveloped place of queen mary hospital from 1960 to 2000. In 1960, the shopping center was built close to the main road to the northwest side. While the car park was situated in the south east corner, the farmland area was located next to the shopping center. Moreover, the hospital was situated in the north east side. In 1980, the shopping center was replaced by two buildings which are cancer centre and pharmacy. Following his, the farmland had been transformed into a nursing school. Furthermore, the hospital and car park were unchanged. Overall, the area underwent substantial changes over the time period. In 2000, the cancer center was built at the place of nursing school and cancer center to the south west side, however the nursing school and car park were situated in the south sidd. Moreover, pharmacy and hospital were unchanged.
The
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given
three maps illustrates the information about the redeveloped place of queen
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mary
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hospital
from 1960 to 2000.

In 1960, the shopping center
was built
close to the main road to the northwest side. While the car park
was situated
in the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
south east
corner, the farmland area
was located
next
to the shopping center.
Moreover
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
was situated
in the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
north east
side.

In 1980, the shopping center
was replaced
by two buildings which are cancer
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centre
and pharmacy. Following his, the farmland had
been transformed
into a nursing school.
Furthermore
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
and car park
were unchanged
.

Overall
, the area underwent substantial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
over the time period. In 2000, the cancer center
was built
at the place of nursing school and cancer center to the
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
south west
side,
however
the nursing school and car park
were situated
in the south
Possible spelling mistake found.
sidd
.
Moreover
, pharmacy and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
hospital
were unchanged
.
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IELTS academic The maps show the changes that have taken place at queen mary hospital since its construction in 1960.

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