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the maps show the changes of a small theatre in 2010 and 2012

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The two layouts depict how a tiny theatre was modified over a period of 2 years, from 2010 to 2012. Overall, this place witnessed a remarkable modernization, with a tremendous development in its stage and the addition of many facilities. Looking at the map in detail, walking by the main entrance, there was a café on the right in 2010. After 2 years, it was demolished to make way for a large box office for the audience to buy tickets, especially in the case of crowds. Subsequently, the admin office and the old ticket office were substituted by the restaurants in order to serve people to rest and eat after watching plays or films. Therefore, the admin office was removed at the top corner. The only facility which remained untouched was the auditorium during the period. Moving to up the map, in two years time, the stage was increased in size to make it easier for the spectators to watch performances. The storage on the left side of the stage was moved to the right one and replaced with the media and new showers. Following that, the old media was knocked down to make room for the hall.
The two layouts depict how a tiny
theatre
was modified
over a period of 2 years, from 2010 to 2012.
Overall
, this place witnessed a remarkable modernization, with a tremendous development in its stage and the addition of
many
facilities.

Looking at the map in detail, walking by the main entrance, there was a café on the right in 2010. After 2 years, it
was demolished
to
make
way for a large box
office
for the audience to
buy
tickets,
especially
in the case of crowds.
Subsequently
, the admin
office
and the
old
ticket
office
were substituted
by the restaurants in order to serve
people
to rest and eat after watching plays or films.
Therefore
, the admin
office
was removed
at the top corner. The
only
facility which remained untouched was the auditorium during the period.

Moving to up the map, in two years time, the stage
was increased
in size to
make
it easier for the spectators to
watch
performances. The storage on the
left
side of the stage was
moved
to the right one and replaced with the media and new showers. Following that, the
old
media
was knocked
down to
make
room for the hall.
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