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The bar graph indicates the percentage of women who are jobless in the 4 nations of Britain

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The bar graph indicates the percentage of women who are jobless in the 4 nations of Britain. Overall, it is evident that while the figures for England, Wales and Northern Ireland underwent a downward trend, the opposite trend was observed in Scotland over the survey. It is also noticeable that more women are without job in England and Scotland than those of Wales and Northern IrelandIn 1975, the consumption of fish and chips was the top scorer with exactly 100 times eaten per year when compared to the rest of the list. However, its figure had a slight dip to above 80 times in 1980 before climbing slightly again by 5 times in the following 5 years. A striking notice is that fish and chips did not gain popularity in Australia’s processed food industry with a plummet by 45 times in 2000
The bar graph indicates the percentage of women who are jobless in the 4 nations of Britain.

Overall
, it is evident that while the figures for England, Wales and Northern Ireland underwent a downward trend, the opposite trend
was observed
in Scotland over the survey. It is
also
noticeable that more women are without job in England and Scotland than those of Wales and Northern
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1975, the consumption of fish and chips was the top scorer with exactly 100
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eaten per year when compared to the rest of the list.
However
, its figure had a slight dip to above 80
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times
in 1980
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before
climbing
slightly
again by 5
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times
in the following 5 years. A striking notice is that fish and chips did not gain popularity in Australia’s processed food industry with a plummet by 45
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times
in 2000
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IELTS academic The bar graph indicates the percentage of women who are jobless in the 4 nations of Britain

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