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The maps show the change in Pentland from 1980 to 2007

The map details alterations to the town of Pentland from 1980 to 2007. Looking from an overall perspective, it is readily apparent that there was a lot of residential and commercial development over the years including the construction of a marina for yachts, shops, houses, and entertainment facilities. In 1980, Pentland consisted mainly of grasslands to the south, two main intersecting roads, an eastern car park, an industrial area in the west, and the sea to the north. By 2007, every area had changed or been relocated. An additional road was built by the coast (now a yacht marina) with a park bordering it in the northwest and seaside apartments on the opposite side. The roads are now lined with shops and the car park added floors and moved from the eastern to the western end of town, adjacent to a new swimming pool. In the south, grasslands made way for a cinema to the west and rows of houses along a new eastward avenue.
The map
details
alterations to the town of Pentland from 1980 to 2007.

Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is
readily
apparent that there was
a lot of
residential and commercial development over the years including the construction of a marina for yachts, shops,
houses
, and entertainment facilities.

In 1980, Pentland consisted
mainly
of grasslands to the south, two main intersecting roads, an eastern car park, an industrial area in the west, and the sea to the north. By 2007, every area had
changed
or
been relocated
. An additional road
was built
by the coast (
now
a yacht marina) with a park bordering it in the northwest and seaside apartments on the opposite side.

The roads are
now
lined with shops and the car park
added
floors and
moved
from the eastern to the western
end
of town, adjacent to a new swimming pool. In the south, grasslands made way for a cinema to the west and rows of
houses
along a new eastward avenue.

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