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The maps illustrate how car park, bus stops, and the roadways which led to the city hospital have developed over 2007 to 2010.

The maps illustrate how car park, bus stops, and the roadways which led to the city hospital have developed over 2007 to 2010. m1pRn
The maps illustrate how car park, bus stops, and the roadways which led to the city hospital have developed over 2007 to 2010. Overall, it can be seen that the public and staff's parking which were together is separated from each other so, the public lot moved to the east side of the hospital. The bus stops were also turned into one huge bus station located in the south of the city hospital. In addition, two roundabouts were constructed on the hospital pavement. In 2007, buses were forced to park at staffs and public's parking, yet this has converted to a bus station in 2010. Moreover, there is a dramatic change in roads figure in comparison with the year 2007 which was the construction of the two roundabouts connected the bus park and staff's car park together and then to the hospital as well. It is evident that these adjustments have been made to control the traffic and provide access to the hospital more conveniently.
The maps illustrate how car
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, bus
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stops
, and the roadways which led to the city
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hospital
have developed over 2007 to 2010.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that the public and staff's parking which were together
is separated
from each other
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so
, the public lot
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moved
to the east side of the
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hospital
. The bus
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stops
were
also
turned into one huge bus station located in the south of the city
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hospital
.
In addition
, two roundabouts
were constructed
on the
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hospital
pavement.

In 2007, buses
were forced
to
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park
at staffs and public's parking,
yet
this has converted to a bus station in 2010.
Moreover
, there is a dramatic
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change
in roads figure
in comparison
with the year 2007 which was the construction of the two roundabouts connected the bus
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park
and staff's car
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park
together and then to the
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hospital
as well
.

It is evident that these adjustments have
been made
to control the traffic and provide access to the
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hospital
more
conveniently
.
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