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The maps display some changes to a small island before and after the constructions which have been developed for tourism.

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The maps display some changes to a small island before and after the constructions which have been developed for tourism. An Overall understanding, It is clear that the island has been transformed into a tourist attraction by the construction of six new features where tourists can stay, eat, play and easily get around. To begin with, The island is about 250 meters long while the width is less than half. Interestingly, The island only had a beach along its western coast and some stands of palms near its eastern and western ends when it was bare. However, two accommodation areas with footpaths have been built in the centre and west of the island respectively. The footpaths in the western accommodation area have been extended westward to the beach where people can now go swimming although These natural features remain unchanged after development. On the other hand, Between the two accommodation areas is reception, which is surrounded by a vehicle track. Likewise, considering the view, this track connects with the footpaths west of it and extends northward to a new restaurant and southward to a new pier. Nevertheless, The eastern part of the island remains unspoilt.
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before
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understanding, It is
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that the
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has
been transformed
into a tourist attraction by the construction of six new features where tourists can stay, eat, play and
easily
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around.

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is about 250 meters long while the width is less than half.
Interestingly
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island
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had a beach along its western coast and
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stands of palms near its eastern and western ends when it was bare.
However
, two accommodation areas with footpaths have
been built
in the
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centre
and west of the
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island
respectively
. The footpaths in the western accommodation area have
been extended
westward to the beach where
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people
can
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now
go swimming although These natural features remain unchanged after development.

On the other hand
, Between the two accommodation areas is reception, which
is surrounded
by a vehicle
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track
.
Likewise
, considering the view, this
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connects with the footpaths west of it and extends northward to a new restaurant and southward to a new pier.
Nevertheless
, The eastern part of the
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remains
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unspoilt
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IELTS academic The maps display some changes to a small island before and after the constructions which have been developed for tourism.

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