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The maps below show how the town of Harborne changes from 1936 to 2007.

The maps below show how the town of Harborne changes from 1936 to 2007. OVg9p
The maps illustrate the development in Harborne’s town between 1936 and 2007. Overall, it is clear that there was a residential area, supermarket, flower shop, road, museum, farmland at the place of the river, sweet shop and butchers, travel agent, cycle path, government office, and golf course respectively. Moreover, trees were reduced. In addition, the post office, bank, and library remained the same. The most noticeable is that at the center of a town the sweet shop and butchers were replaced by a supermarket, and there was a flower shop instead of the travel agent. However, the post office, bank, and library remained the same. In the northwest, trees were reduced, and there was a residential area in the place of the river, in the northeast. In the southwest, the place which was only for cycling were dedicated to a road. In the south government office was demolished to make a way for the museum. In the southeast, the golf course was knocked down, and replaced by farmland.
The maps illustrate the development in
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Harborne
’s town between 1936 and 2007.

Overall
, it is
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that there was a residential area, supermarket, flower
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shop
, road, museum, farmland at the place of the river, sweet
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shop
and butchers, travel agent, cycle path,
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government
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office
, and golf course
respectively
.
Moreover
, trees were
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reduced
.
In addition
, the post
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office
, bank, and library remained the same.

The most noticeable is that at the center of a town the sweet
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shop
and butchers
were replaced
by a supermarket, and there was a flower
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shop
instead
of the travel agent.
However
, the post
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office
, bank, and library remained the same.

In the northwest, trees were
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reduced
, and there was a residential area in the place of the river, in the northeast. In the southwest, the place which was
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only
for cycling
were dedicated
to a road.
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In
the south
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government
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office
was demolished
to
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make
a way for the museum.
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In
the southeast, the golf course
was knocked
down, and replaced by farmland.

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