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The map shows the hydroelectric power

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The map illustrates how the town changed from 1990 to 2010 after the erection of hydroelectric power station. Overall, it is noticable that most part of the area were modified over the given period (20 years), making the town more industrial and less rural; however only some parts remained unchanged. Focusing firstly on the north of the town, the biggest change was modification of river and farmlands which then gave way to the construction of a lake. Surprisingly, some other parts like 'Forest' and 'Ancient structure', which located to the west of the river in 1990, were also demolished untill 2010. Additionally, a new hotel took over old villages in 2010. Regarding the rest of the map, southern mountains were destroyed, and new electricity substations were built in both sides of a river to distribute electricity to the village which was reconstructed and moved to the east side of the river.
The map illustrates how the town
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changed
from 1990 to 2010 after the erection of hydroelectric power station.

Overall
, it is
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noticable
that most part of the area
were modified
over the
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given
period (20 years), making the town more industrial and less rural;
however
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only
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some
parts remained unchanged.

Focusing
firstly
on the north of the town, the biggest
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change
was modification of
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river
and farmlands which then gave way to the construction of a lake.
Surprisingly
,
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some
other parts like 'Forest' and 'Ancient structure', which located to the west of the
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river
in 1990, were
also
demolished
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untill
2010.
Additionally
, a new hotel took over
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old
villages in 2010.

Regarding the rest of the map, southern mountains were
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destroyed
, and new electricity substations
were built
in both sides of a
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river
to distribute electricity to the village which
was reconstructed
and
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moved
to the east side of the
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river
.
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IELTS academic The map shows the hydroelectric power

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