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The map show improvements that have been made in Paradise Island between past and the present day.

The map show improvements that have been made in Paradise Island between past and the present day. kel6n
The following maps demonstrate an overview of the recent transformation of the Paradise Island and it clearly describes the prominent changes. Overall, before implementing new ideas Paradise Island had been experienced no considerable change; however, after undertaking some important steps, this place has been witnessed much more noticeable modifications. It is obvious from the maps that the most prominent changes has been witnessed hotel complex for increasing number of tourists the elimination of the trees and the introducation of open restaurant. Most important renovation is that Natural spring area has been replaced by new cafe. Looking at the figures in more details, the pier has been renovated with one more extra pier which is not necessarily to shift anywhere. The rocks exhibited no considerable change over the period and remained as it was. Interestingly enough, swimming permitted has been set up next to the beach so tourists able to get extra faclities from over there.
The following maps demonstrate an overview of the recent transformation of the Paradise Island and it
clearly
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describes
the prominent
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changes
.

Overall
,
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before
implementing new
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ideas
Paradise Island had
been experienced
no considerable
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change
;
however
, after undertaking
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some
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important
steps, this place has
been witnessed
much more noticeable modifications.

It is obvious from the maps that the most prominent
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changes
has
been witnessed
hotel complex for increasing number of tourists the elimination of the trees and the
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introducation
of open restaurant. Most
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important
renovation is that Natural spring area has
been replaced
by new
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cafe
.

Looking at the figures in more
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details
, the pier has
been renovated
with one more extra pier which is not
necessarily
to shift anywhere. The rocks exhibited no considerable
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change
over the period and remained as it was.
Interestingly
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enough
, swimming permitted has
been set
up
next
to the beach
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so
tourists able to
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get
extra
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faclities
from over there.

IELTS academic The map show improvements that have been made in Paradise Island between past and the present day.

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