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The map below shows the town of langley between 1910 and 1940.

The map below shows the town of langley between 1910 and 1940. 5BOGn
The gendered map illustrates the data about Langley town is comparing between 1910 and 1950. Overall, it can be seen that a lot of differences between the two years also there are numerous changes happen in the Langley town. First, in 1910, There are only two important roads available, people lives on the west side of the town as Jordan street was vertically placed in the west as well as the lane on both sides was occupied by Townhouses. Subsequently, Sherman street was situated in the middle of the town horizontally, also this lane touching store, laundry, cafe and the northside was located by the factory. Moreover, the wasteland was situated in the north-east and the south, railway workers cottages were established in the South direct by connecting a railway line. On the other hand, in 1950, people facilities had been changed after 40 years, the factory was replaced by Sherman mansions. Therefore, Jordan and Sherman's street is expanded and connected, townhouses had been exchanged by flats and also Sherman park situated in the centre of town, children's play some held in one side corner of the park it touching the new lane along with three stores had been constructed in the Eastside. Laundry and cafe buildings held beside the Sherman mansions in the North-East direction.
The gendered map illustrates the data about Langley
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town
is comparing between 1910 and 1950.

Overall
, it can be
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seen
that
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a lot of
differences between the two years
also
there are numerous
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changes
happen in the Langley town.

First
, in 1910, There are
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only
two
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important
roads available,
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people
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lives
on the west side of the
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town
as Jordan street was
vertically
placed in the west
as well
as the lane on both sides
was occupied
by Townhouses.
Subsequently
, Sherman street
was situated
in the middle of the
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town
horizontally
,
also
this lane touching store, laundry,
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cafe
and the
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northside
was located
by the factory.
Moreover
, the wasteland
was situated
in the north-east and the south, railway workers cottages
were established
in the South direct by connecting a railway line.

On the other hand
, in 1950,
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people
facilities had been
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changed
after 40 years, the factory
was replaced
by Sherman mansions.
Therefore
, Jordan and Sherman's street
is expanded
and connected, townhouses had
been exchanged
by flats and
also
Sherman park situated in the
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centre
of
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town
, children's play
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some
held in one side corner of the park
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it touching
the new lane along with three stores had
been constructed
in the Eastside. Laundry and
'cafe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "café"
cafe
buildings held beside the Sherman mansions in the North-East direction.

IELTS academic The map below shows the town of langley between 1910 and 1940.

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216 words
6.0
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