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The map below shows the changes made to a hospital layout plan from 2005 to the present day.

The map below shows the changes made to a hospital layout plan from 2005 to the present day. 5bqMm
The two maps compare the modifications made on a hospital building plan in the current day with that in 2005. It can be observed that, the hospital has been expanded with the addition of a minor operations room and the car parking area has been extended to accommodate 30 cars instead of previously available 12 car parking spaces. In 2005, the entrance was on the front side of the hospital, which was now shifted to south-west corner of the structure. Previously, the reception desk situated almost the middle of the hospital, was transferred and positioned to the new entrance area. In addition, a small children’s play area is also provided near the entry area. Also, the entire seating arrangement has been renovated and the no of seats were increased from 11 to 14. Interestingly, the office room was also refurbished from its typical rectangular shape to a trapezoidal one. Although, there were 3 consulting rooms in 2005, they were resized attain 4 such rooms without any addition of area. Finally, a minor operations room was built in the north- west corner of the medical centre next to the physiotherapy room.
The two maps compare the modifications made on a
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hospital
building plan in the
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current
day with that in 2005.

It can
be observed
that, the
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hospital
has
been expanded
with the addition of a minor operations
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room
and the car parking
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area
has
been extended
to accommodate 30 cars
instead
of previously available 12 car parking spaces.

In 2005, the entrance was on the front side of the
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hospital
, which was
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now
shifted to south-west corner of the structure. Previously, the reception desk situated almost the middle of the
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hospital
,
was transferred
and positioned to the new entrance
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area
.
In addition
, a
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small
children’s play
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area
is
also
provided near the entry
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area
.
Also
, the entire seating arrangement has
been renovated
and the
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no
of seats
were increased
from 11 to 14.

Interestingly
, the office
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room
was
also
refurbished from its typical rectangular shape to a trapezoidal one. Although, there were 3 consulting
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rooms
in 2005, they
were resized
attain 4 such
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rooms
without any addition of
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area
.
Finally
, a minor operations
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room
was built
in the north- west corner of the medical
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centre
next
to the physiotherapy
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room
.
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IELTS academic The map below shows the changes made to a hospital layout plan from 2005 to the present day.

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