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The pie charts show the proportion of energy consumption for various kind of household and the involvement in producing greenhouse gases in Australia.

The pie charts show the proportion of energy consumption for various kind of household and the involvement in producing greenhouse gases in Australia. mbOO8
The two pie charts provide information about the proportion of household energy usage and the amount of greenhouse gases produced in Australia. Overall, other appliances are the most significant household energy used, whereas cooking and standby is the least used energy in Australia. In comparison standby is the smallest segment of the greenhouse gas, while heating and cooling is the largest segment produced. The most striking feature of the chart is that the energy heating and cooling used is 20%, whereas the greenhouse gas produces almost double (38%) of it. The water heating percentage of the greenhouse gas was 25% which is slightly more than the energy produced (23%). The third most energy used was other appliances. It consumed 24% of the energy which was quite high compared to the greenhouse gas which was produced at 16%. The greenhouse emission produced 7% of lighting and refrigerator, while the usage was 11% and 12% respectively. The amount of cooked used was 4%, whereas the amount of greenhouse gas produced was slightly increased by 1%. The greenhouse gas generates 3% of standby, while the energy needed was slightly more (5%).
The two pie charts provide information about the proportion of household
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energy
usage and the amount of
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greenhouse
gases
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produced
in Australia.

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, other appliances are the most significant household
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energy
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, whereas cooking and standby is the least
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used
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energy
in Australia. In
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comparison
standby is the smallest segment of the
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greenhouse
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gas
, while heating and cooling is the largest segment produced.

The most striking feature of the chart is that the
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energy
heating and cooling
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used
is 20%, whereas the
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greenhouse
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gas
produces almost double (38%) of it. The water heating percentage of the
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greenhouse
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gas
was 25% which is
slightly
more than the
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energy
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produced
(23%).

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The
third most
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energy
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used
was other appliances. It consumed 24% of the
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energy
which was quite high compared to the
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greenhouse
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gas
which was
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produced
at 16%. The
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emission
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produced
7% of lighting and refrigerator, while the usage was 11% and 12%
respectively
. The amount of cooked
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used
was 4%, whereas the amount of
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greenhouse
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gas
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produced
was
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increased by 1%.
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generates 3% of standby, while the
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needed was
slightly
more (5%).
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