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The map below shows the changes in 1920 and today.

The map below shows the changes in 1920 and today. BYmA9
A glance at the layouts exhibit the modifications which have taken place between 1920 and present time. From the overall perception, it is immensely clear that radical changes have taken place the park converted into functional park. By adding amphitheatre for concerts and water features. Among a myriad of alterations, one spectacular change has occurred in the north and south area. Besides this, in the west- south corner the stage for musicians has established; however, it was demolished, and amphitheatre for concerts has constructed. Besides this, pond for water plants was located in the north which has replaced with children play area.
A glance at the layouts exhibit the modifications which have taken place between 1920 and present time.

From the
overall
perception, it is
immensely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that radical
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
have taken place the park converted into functional park. By adding
Possible spelling mistake. 'amphitheatre' is British English.
amphitheatre
for concerts and water features.

Among a myriad of alterations, one spectacular
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
has occurred in the north and south area.
Besides
this, in the west- south corner the stage for musicians has established;
however
, it
was demolished
, and
Possible spelling mistake. 'amphitheatre' is British English.
amphitheatre
for concerts has constructed.
Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
Besides
this, pond for water plants
was located
in the north which has replaced with children play area.
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